'antiseptics fill our lungs so we cleanse our every breath'
i really like that (:
sweetie, use spell check, its there for our benefit! (hospital)
and i would suggest you take a gander at the last line and find a way to change it so the word 'white' isn't repeated. having been a person who just got out of a two week stint in the hospital, i know the topic very well, and your descriptions don't have to be limited to cliches!
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'antiseptics fill our lungs
so we cleanse our every breath'
i really like that (:
sweetie, use spell check, its there for our benefit! (hospital)
and i would suggest you take a gander at the last line and find a way to change it so the word 'white' isn't repeated. having been a person who just got out of a two week stint in the hospital, i know the topic very well, and your descriptions don't have to be limited to cliches!
i love your poem keep up the good work!
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